The Gate- my story

Here it is, it's a bit cheesy right now but this is just my first draft

:pkheart: The Gate :pkheart:
Prolouge

Chiwatchu padded along the cold, sandy banks of the Black Sea. He was shaking miserably and found it hard to resist to lay down. His charcoal black fur made him look like a mere shadow against the outline the moon spread across the sky. Suddenly he raised his proud muzzle to the West and howled to the skies. He sighed when there was no response. No, it couldn't be, I don't know why I keep trying to find that wolf... he thought. His searches for the mysterious white she-wolf in his dream had just been worthless tries. She didn't exist, she couldn't exist. But Chiwatchu had always felt something tugging him this way, evil or good. It was almost like something wanted him here. Then something else caught his memory, his stomach. If he didn't eat soon Chiwatchu wouldn't live to see the next sun. He lifted his head to taste the air, but didn't get the wonderful prey scent he was hoping for. The prey was running away, because now it knew that in large groups, it could kill all the predators in the world. Then suddenly Chiwatchu picked up a scent he thought he would never smell. Another wolf. "No," he thought aloud. "It can't be. They only made one of each predator on the Earth." Then Chiwatchu remembered the pair of Grizzlies he had ment up on the Rodurians (Rocky Mountains). He thought for a moment. Had Larina and Harja made a mistake, or did they want this? These questions flew through his mind, making him unaware of the pair of eyes watching him. The gods were shape-shifters, maybe it was one of them. But could they had wanted something else. That would explain the dreams. It is possible, Chiwatchu realized with a shudder. Then he saw it, a beautiful white she-wolf with amber eyes. Her paws seemed to skim the ground and she bounded torwards the forest. "Wait!" he howled, not thinking. No, that was stupid, I never should of done that! Then the white wolf turned and Chiwatchu watched her eyes widen is disbeleif. "Y-you're a wolf too?" she studdered. "Or has Harja come to visit me?" Chiwatchu hesitated, this was a real wolf, of his own kind, of his own blood. "I am no Harja, but I am Chiwatchu, and it amazes me of your existance." The she-wolf seemed mesmirized. "Well then..." she said thinking, "I'm Nixaline." Chiwatchu tried to read her expression but got nothing of it. "I have had dreams about you," Nixaline said to his surprise, and dread. "I dreamt that a charcoal wolf with powers as mighty as the sea would help me in balancing out Predator and Prey at The Gate."
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Chapter One: Larina

Larina looked down at the two new wolves. Her spirit darkened as she realized what they were into, and that she new she could do nothing to help it. Harja and her had made a mistake, for they should of known that the scrawny little prey would figure out their fears soon enough. Now the burden was being placed on two real wolfs' shoulders, not her own. To make matters worse, they had just met each other. Perhaps there was a glimmer of hope that they would make it deep down, but she could not feel it. As she watched the two predators pad on, she realized one thing, that they were unaware of what they would face at The Gate, and what their destinies would be. She repeated the last few words of the strange propechy spoken to her, and only her alone. She had never told Harja.
But before there is love, a heart will be broken.
Larina looked over the mountains, and past the sandy plains, to the stars. Even she didn't know what they really were. Then something else alarmed her, another line of the propechy.
Beware of the Betrayer.
It haunted her everywhere, and she wondered who the Betrayer was.
Perhaps it was the world itself. She turned into a cream white wolf and slowly drifted downward torwards the unexpecting wolves.
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"Hello," that was the voice Nixaline heard behind her. She jumped and turned around unaware of what she would see. "Larina?" Chiwatchu suddenly put in. Nixaline was surprised, the godess looked just like her. Creamy-white fur, lightning-quick paws. The only thing that was missing was her soft, amber eyes. Instead she displayed a silvery-blue that sent a shiver down her spine. "Yes, it is me," Larina spoke again. "For I have come with you a propechy, but you musn't tell anyone. Anyone." Larina closed her eyes, then began. As she spoke, Seekers jumped out of the shadows, their glittering coats making Nixaline blink. She watched as the Seekers paws floated above the ground, and they to joined in, lifting a chorus of howls throughout the night. But only Nixaline and Chiwatchu could hear them.
The clouds will be soaked in blood,
and the stars will rise.
For three suns the sky will be blakened into night.
And They will destroy what was made during the first light.
But Beware of the Betrayer,
because before there is love, a heart will be broken.
Suddenly a strange sleep overwhelmed her, and she too, joined in with the howls.
Then all that was left was the light of the moon.
It was shining so brightly Nixaline started to wonder if it was really the sun. She looked around, Larina and the Seekers had gone, now all that was left was Chiwatchu, her, and the stars. "Let's get a move on..." he growled. "I don't know what will face, but we better be ready." That was when Nixaline noticed how shadowy his pelt was. Almost black, but not quite. She also noticed his bright silvery-green eyes. How full of courage, and fear they were. "Right," she barked back. "We must get to the Gate before the prey realizes what is going on." She pawed the ground. "Well... what are we waiting for?" she asked puzzled by the silence. "Oh... just something. Er, nothing," Chiwatchu barked, then he shot off, running West. Nixaline shrugged and sped after him. Jumping about the grasslands, she spied a rabbit. The first real prey she had seen. But she didn't dare touch it, because now Nixaline knew how dangerous hunting could be. For a second she watched Chiwatchu look at it with hungry eyes, but the appearance of Larina seemed to energize them. The only question was, why didn't Harja show up? It confused her. Were the gods hiding something, something that they didn't want them to know?

Sorry that was such a short chapter, I will lengthen these!
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Chapter 2: The Evil One

"No, No, No, NO!" Kieldrah shouted at the hawk. "Yes, misstress, I'm sorry but, Nixaline and Chiwatchu have found each other." Kieldrah looked horrified. "Now the plan has been ruined, dont you see? When the prey siezed control, we could become the true Evil One and enslave all the animals." Her pale gray pelt didn't even react to the thick moonlight. Most animals thought she was dull, but they would all see. Kieldrah was no more than a dog, a huge, huge greyhound in fact. But most anything called her a preyhound, because she loved to kill. She bared her white teeth at the grassland. At least the birds are for me... she thought. It was hard being the only animal that was so.... so different. Nobody even knew what a hound was. That's why Kieldrah wanted the gate's power for herself. It wasn't even the Gate's power anyways, the gate was just the thing holding it. The real prize was the Lone Power, hidden somewhere inside the Gate. She snarled at the wall than turned again to face the full moon. "If someone has to get rid of those ruffians... than why don't we summon up..." Keildrah began. "No, not the Dark Harja. He's too powerful, even for-"
"Shut up, hawk!" she howled with rage, her eyes burning into the poor bird. The hawk shrunk back. "Yes, Keildrah," he squacked. "Now, now, at Dawn tomorrow we'll begin the ritual. By Dusk tomorrow- we'll have Dark Harja on our side," she laughed. "I hope you get a good rest, for it will be your last."
As the hawk flew out of Keildrah's cavern he rounded the corner, and flew into a gathering of birds, breaking it up. "Keildrah's going to summon up Dark Harja tomorrow at dawn!" he called.
"Now that that's taken care of," she assured herself, "On to more... important things."

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Nixaline walked through the barren land, it's cool air hanging with no wind to blow it. Suddenly a huge, pale-green cloud covered the land, making it almost as dark as night. "Chiwatchu, what was that!?" she exclaimed.
"I don't know," he admitted. "But whatever it is, I'm sure it's not just a cloud."
"D-do you think it could be... Dark Harja's magic? Has he been summoned?" she asked. Nixaline shivered from the thought. Suddenly, something occured to her, but Chiwatchu said it, like he had read her mind.
"No, not yet. But he must be being summoned right now," Chiwatchu answered coldly, with some hesitation. "It seems the clouds are an affect. These clouds are made of dark magic, we must get to a place that hasn't been taken over by clouds!"
Before Nixaline could say anything, she was running after Chiwatchu. Her white fur only looked green underneath the clouds.


That's all I got so far!

WOW Pumpkin pie when you are all done you need to send it to a publishing house I bet that you could get it published I know I would buy it!!!!!!! Keep up the good work.

Thanks I never thought of that!

Your welcome^^

So... are you writing a story?

Good job! Like Nanook, I think you should find some publisher online or in the real world, and show them that story!

But then again, you should probably know...that would only make the story's chapters 1 1/2 pages long.

Yeah you would probably have to make a lot of Chapters unless you want it to be like a picture book or something which isn't bad

Well of course I'll make them longer, I just have to get my ideas jotted down first. I might even illustrate it myself... or ask somebody from my class that is really good at it!

Maybe you could even make a series or a trilogy *Nanook likes trilogys*

Maybe... but first things first! I'll work on the first picture today... or at least a sketch of it!

Cool can I see it when your done?

Sure, I can take a picture and attempt to upload it! Oh and I have to go to soccer, so tell Puppyrock that I wont be on for awhile!

Ok

Ok, I'm back!

Cattails likes. ^_^
Seriously, LOVE what you've got so far. I should get back to my story... not my posted one, but one about a bunch of creatures I made up...

Yeah!! Find a publisher! I have a story, but I think it's a little
childish... :oops:

Post it anyway, Tiger!

Thanks guys! I'm still thinking of ways to introduce Keildrah...